Hello, this is Etheru, and today, I'm going to try and riff Shiny's fanfic from back when he was 16. Let's get started!
Do be warned, though. I am not exactly what you'd call the "smart type".
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Chapter 0 a discussion on the semantics of Abyssian lore
An interesting title, if a bit wordy, I think.
Ah, good evening gentle readers my name is Simon Culp and I am the keeper of the history of our fine land.
HAI SIMON! :D
What will we learn about the history of your fine land?
This is a tale of two heroes who know each other, yet due to some dark means do not know each other.
...I have learned nothing about your fine land. :|
Also, lol contradiction.
What you are about to read is my account of the last great battle of our land and in particular the forming of a small group of heroes who called themselves power factor. Why such an outlandish name you may ask?
Yes, why is there such an outlandish name?
It along with many other mysteries gradually revealed as our saga goes on but for now, I shall supply you with a history of our fair land and also some background.
...Then why make me ask? And okay, maybe I'll get some good history on your fine land.
Now while I do not appear, as of yet in this fantastic tale I shall interrupt the narrative flow from time to time to give you other background titbits but for now enjoy.
Will you also do little cutaway jokes and gags?
Ages ago on earth, magic was an everyday reality. The beings and beasts of a thousand mythologies roamed the world, their remarkable attributes, and abilities derived from a palpable mystic aura that suffused the planet. There were entire communities, hidden nations of magicians, the twelve greatest of which keyed their power to the sublime properties of gemstones.
I thought we were learning history of this fine land, not mythology... Then again, I suppose those are the same thing.
Each of the great houses ruled by a particular gem, which owed its might to that gem’s properties and attributes for example the house of Aquamarine lived underwater. Although separated by vast often-continental distances. These twelve houses maintained constant contact with each other, and although their existence was a secret, still they wielded great influence in the mundane world. However, all that changed with a distant catastrophe of great importance.
They had found out that none of them were wearing any pants.
...
I couldn't think of anything better! Don't look at me like that! :|
For, far away in space, a major sun went nova, and the violent emanations of its explosion had vast repercussions on the mystical as well as physical planes. Great zodiacal alignments disrupted; a flux resonated through the magical field that permeates through the universe, and the ultimate result was that earth, once a great epicentre of mystic concentrations, lost most of its magic.
SCIENCE
As the rulers of the twelve magical houses discovered that the magic was going away, they sought to save themselves and the rest of the mystical community of earth. For they knew that once the magic was all but gone, they would be reduced to normal humanity, and the rich mixture of magical creatures in the world would die!
I haven't figured out what to say, yet. This sounds fairly interesting.
The masters of the twelve houses poured all their magic into eight crystals, which they blessed, to a young witch called Gaia. They bade her to look for a suitable uniformed mystical realm, a dimension far removed from the earthly plane, and then use the eight crystals to create a new world for the magical inhabitants of earth (now referred to as Gaians from now on). At last, Gaia succeeded and found a new world, which the grateful inhabitants called Gaia in honour of their saviour.
YAY! A HAPPY ENDING FOR ALL! :D
Meanwhile on earth it took several centuries but magic slowly crept back and the age of the second age of magic
Lol redundancy.
begun as Gaia prospered powered by not only the eight crystals but the twelve mystical gems as well. All was peaceful until 200 years ago when a rift between the houses caused six rebellious houses to attempt to create a world of their own. (These six were opal, aquamarine, sardonix, moonstone, turquoise, and ruby) their attempt failed and a second world sized continent became dimensionally bonded to Gaia this was then named as Nocturne and the six rebels called it their own while the other six (Amethyst, emerald, Garnet, diamond, sapphire and topaz) ruled over the other six continents.
Should have just gone on strike, that works wonders.
After the failed Nocturne plan, the twelve rulers sprung into action to stop such a thing from happening again. The twelve gems carved into twelve mystical items and spread across Gaia. A thirteenth was carved into the shape of a glove from a new gem, which was found called Adamant and hidden. Whoever found these thirteen items granted destructive powers of an unknown capability. Being a mystical realm Gaia simulates, but not bound by, the laws of physical reality.
So... You can't even touch the glove?
The eight crystals create even such everyday givens as the downward pull of gravity. Gaia consists of seven continents one of which covers half the planet (see above for the explanation). Two moons circulate the planet, as does its own sun. The sea is circular and cascades down the sides of the planet (explorers sent to find out what causes this has never returned). The fates of the twelve houses are unknown however, both the crystals and the gems of power still exists to this day.
I'm betting the house members are just in a bar drinking their sorrows out.
Gaia remains a land of magic and mystery to this day, a land of startling beauty and awesome horror. It is a world where the mystical possibilities are endless, where the profusion and diversity of life is obedient to the dictates of mystical rather than biological laws, where all people manipulate magic to some measure, however great or small, and where danger, wonder, and high adventure are the only certainties. Our story begins in a land called Abyssa a corrupt land filled with greed and evil. This fact went over the head of one busboy that was just about ready to begin a quest one, which will not only turn his world upside down but also forever change the way he views his world but I am getting ahead of myself.
Well, I hope he's ready for a strange world.
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I'm not sure what to think of this first chapter, except that a lot of the World-Building is dumped on you in just this page, rather than gradually building it up. Sometimes the narration seems pointless, due to the fact that he sometimes switches subjects on a whim rather than sticking to one, but then again, I don't fancy myself an expert.
I might try and do other fanfics and such, but for now, heading off.
Do be warned, though. I am not exactly what you'd call the "smart type".
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Chapter 0 a discussion on the semantics of Abyssian lore
An interesting title, if a bit wordy, I think.
Ah, good evening gentle readers my name is Simon Culp and I am the keeper of the history of our fine land.
HAI SIMON! :D
What will we learn about the history of your fine land?
This is a tale of two heroes who know each other, yet due to some dark means do not know each other.
...I have learned nothing about your fine land. :|
Also, lol contradiction.
What you are about to read is my account of the last great battle of our land and in particular the forming of a small group of heroes who called themselves power factor. Why such an outlandish name you may ask?
Yes, why is there such an outlandish name?
It along with many other mysteries gradually revealed as our saga goes on but for now, I shall supply you with a history of our fair land and also some background.
...Then why make me ask? And okay, maybe I'll get some good history on your fine land.
Now while I do not appear, as of yet in this fantastic tale I shall interrupt the narrative flow from time to time to give you other background titbits but for now enjoy.
Will you also do little cutaway jokes and gags?
Ages ago on earth, magic was an everyday reality. The beings and beasts of a thousand mythologies roamed the world, their remarkable attributes, and abilities derived from a palpable mystic aura that suffused the planet. There were entire communities, hidden nations of magicians, the twelve greatest of which keyed their power to the sublime properties of gemstones.
I thought we were learning history of this fine land, not mythology... Then again, I suppose those are the same thing.
Each of the great houses ruled by a particular gem, which owed its might to that gem’s properties and attributes for example the house of Aquamarine lived underwater. Although separated by vast often-continental distances. These twelve houses maintained constant contact with each other, and although their existence was a secret, still they wielded great influence in the mundane world. However, all that changed with a distant catastrophe of great importance.
They had found out that none of them were wearing any pants.
...
I couldn't think of anything better! Don't look at me like that! :|
For, far away in space, a major sun went nova, and the violent emanations of its explosion had vast repercussions on the mystical as well as physical planes. Great zodiacal alignments disrupted; a flux resonated through the magical field that permeates through the universe, and the ultimate result was that earth, once a great epicentre of mystic concentrations, lost most of its magic.
SCIENCE
As the rulers of the twelve magical houses discovered that the magic was going away, they sought to save themselves and the rest of the mystical community of earth. For they knew that once the magic was all but gone, they would be reduced to normal humanity, and the rich mixture of magical creatures in the world would die!
I haven't figured out what to say, yet. This sounds fairly interesting.
The masters of the twelve houses poured all their magic into eight crystals, which they blessed, to a young witch called Gaia. They bade her to look for a suitable uniformed mystical realm, a dimension far removed from the earthly plane, and then use the eight crystals to create a new world for the magical inhabitants of earth (now referred to as Gaians from now on). At last, Gaia succeeded and found a new world, which the grateful inhabitants called Gaia in honour of their saviour.
YAY! A HAPPY ENDING FOR ALL! :D
Meanwhile on earth it took several centuries but magic slowly crept back and the age of the second age of magic
Lol redundancy.
begun as Gaia prospered powered by not only the eight crystals but the twelve mystical gems as well. All was peaceful until 200 years ago when a rift between the houses caused six rebellious houses to attempt to create a world of their own. (These six were opal, aquamarine, sardonix, moonstone, turquoise, and ruby) their attempt failed and a second world sized continent became dimensionally bonded to Gaia this was then named as Nocturne and the six rebels called it their own while the other six (Amethyst, emerald, Garnet, diamond, sapphire and topaz) ruled over the other six continents.
Should have just gone on strike, that works wonders.
After the failed Nocturne plan, the twelve rulers sprung into action to stop such a thing from happening again. The twelve gems carved into twelve mystical items and spread across Gaia. A thirteenth was carved into the shape of a glove from a new gem, which was found called Adamant and hidden. Whoever found these thirteen items granted destructive powers of an unknown capability. Being a mystical realm Gaia simulates, but not bound by, the laws of physical reality.
So... You can't even touch the glove?
The eight crystals create even such everyday givens as the downward pull of gravity. Gaia consists of seven continents one of which covers half the planet (see above for the explanation). Two moons circulate the planet, as does its own sun. The sea is circular and cascades down the sides of the planet (explorers sent to find out what causes this has never returned). The fates of the twelve houses are unknown however, both the crystals and the gems of power still exists to this day.
I'm betting the house members are just in a bar drinking their sorrows out.
Gaia remains a land of magic and mystery to this day, a land of startling beauty and awesome horror. It is a world where the mystical possibilities are endless, where the profusion and diversity of life is obedient to the dictates of mystical rather than biological laws, where all people manipulate magic to some measure, however great or small, and where danger, wonder, and high adventure are the only certainties. Our story begins in a land called Abyssa a corrupt land filled with greed and evil. This fact went over the head of one busboy that was just about ready to begin a quest one, which will not only turn his world upside down but also forever change the way he views his world but I am getting ahead of myself.
Well, I hope he's ready for a strange world.
----
I'm not sure what to think of this first chapter, except that a lot of the World-Building is dumped on you in just this page, rather than gradually building it up. Sometimes the narration seems pointless, due to the fact that he sometimes switches subjects on a whim rather than sticking to one, but then again, I don't fancy myself an expert.
I might try and do other fanfics and such, but for now, heading off.
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