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    Post by Shiny on Tue Jul 31, 2012 11:28 pm

    So yeah this is my Fanfic which somehow merged final fantasy, dragonball z and maybe a bit of power rangers all in one...this is chapter 0 of many horrible chapters...I hope it will be riffed as it deserves to be and heres a little game...point out all the stuff I ripped off from other works...


    Chapter 0 a discussion on the semantics of Abyssian lore

    Ah, good evening gentle readers my name is Simon Culp and I am the keeper of the history of our fine land. This is a tale of two heroes who know each other, yet due to some dark means do not know each other. What you are about to read is my account of the last great battle of our land and in particular the forming of a small group of heroes who called themselves power factor. Why such an outlandish name you may ask? It along with many other mysteries gradually revealed as our saga goes on but for now, I shall supply you with a history of our fair land and also some background. Now while I do not appear, as of yet in this fantastic tale I shall interrupt the narrative flow from time to time to give you other background titbits but for now enjoy.

    Ages ago on earth, magic was an everyday reality. The beings and beasts of a thousand mythologies roamed the world, their remarkable attributes, and abilities derived from a palpable mystic aura that suffused the planet. There were entire communities, hidden nations of magicians, the twelve greatest of which keyed their power to the sublime properties of gemstones.

    Each of the great houses ruled by a particular gem, which owed its might to that gem’s properties and attributes for example the house of Aquamarine lived underwater. Although separated by vast often-continental distances. These twelve houses maintained constant contact with each other, and although their existence was a secret, still they wielded great influence in the mundane world. However, all that changed with a distant catastrophe of great importance.

    For, far away in space, a major sun went nova, and the violent emanations of its explosion had vast repercussions on the mystical as well as physical planes. Great zodiacal alignments disrupted; a flux resonated through the magical field that permeates through the universe, and the ultimate result was that earth, once a great epicentre of mystic concentrations, lost most of its magic.

    As the rulers of the twelve magical houses discovered that the magic was going away, they sought to save themselves and the rest of the mystical community of earth. For they knew that once the magic was all but gone, they would be reduced to normal humanity, and the rich mixture of magical creatures in the world would die!

    The masters of the twelve houses poured all their magic into eight crystals, which they blessed, to a young witch called Gaia. They bade her to look for a suitable uniformed mystical realm, a dimension far removed from the earthly plane, and then use the eight crystals to create a new world for the magical inhabitants of earth (now referred to as Gaians from now on). At last, Gaia succeeded and found a new world, which the grateful inhabitants called Gaia in honour of their saviour.

    Meanwhile on earth it took several centuries but magic slowly crept back and the age of the second age of magic begun as Gaia prospered powered by not only the eight crystals but the twelve mystical gems as well. All was peaceful until 200 years ago when a rift between the houses caused six rebellious houses to attempt to create a world of their own. (These six were opal, aquamarine, sardonix, moonstone, turquoise, and ruby) their attempt failed and a second world sized continent became dimensionally bonded to Gaia this was then named as Nocturne and the six rebels called it their own while the other six (Amethyst, emerald, Garnet, diamond, sapphire and topaz) ruled over the other six continents.

    After the failed Nocturne plan, the twelve rulers sprung into action to stop such a thing from happening again. The twelve gems carved into twelve mystical items and spread across Gaia. A thirteenth was carved into the shape of a glove from a new gem, which was found called Adamant and hidden. Whoever found these thirteen items granted destructive powers of an unknown capability. Being a mystical realm Gaia simulates, but not bound by, the laws of physical reality.

    The eight crystals create even such everyday givens as the downward pull of gravity. Gaia consists of seven continents one of which covers half the planet (see above for the explanation). Two moons circulate the planet, as does its own sun. The sea is circular and cascades down the sides of the planet (explorers sent to find out what causes this has never returned). The fates of the twelve houses are unknown however, both the crystals and the gems of power still exists to this day.

    Gaia remains a land of magic and mystery to this day, a land of startling beauty and awesome horror. It is a world where the mystical possibilities are endless, where the profusion and diversity of life is obedient to the dictates of mystical rather than biological laws, where all people manipulate magic to some measure, however great or small, and where danger, wonder, and high adventure are the only certainties. Our story begins in a land called Abyssa a corrupt land filled with greed and evil. This fact went over the head of one busboy that was just about ready to begin a quest one, which will not only turn his world upside down but also forever change the way he views his world but I am getting ahead of myself.

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    Post by Shiny on Sat Aug 04, 2012 9:33 pm

    Hero number one appears and is not a self insert...nope not at all...

    Chapter 1 Battle of the Bairns

    It was a typical wet day in Abyssa, The land where water was mass-produced. In hindsight, David had wished he had worn something wet proof. David Daark was the royal busboy. Any nasty jobs in the kitchen the king wanted done sent to him and some not involving the kitchen at all. Like today’s, job which was the nastiest yet. He was getting ready for an exploration of a bizarre rock formation that appeared overnight. It was Dark inside and he knew it was suicide to delve inside on his own. Sadly, his adopted father Dorrace was busy attending to other business with the king.

    He cursed his luck then kissed the locket on his neck. It was unknown where he had acquired it Dorrace had said to him that it was round his neck when he found his out cold body outside the city of Thaliana. He sighed, and then quickly put a foot into the cave and sighed again to himself “here we go wonder why the king needs me to go in here anyway,” he went deeper into the cave; it was getting so deep his words were echoing around him. He turned on his torch and made his way even further down when suddenly a horrific shake pulled the ceiling down blocking the entrance above.

    Rocks and boulders begun to topple battering David in the face then a much larger boulder fell causing David’s rope to snap and he begun to fall. As rocks from above continued to batter him and walls scraped into His arm it cracked against a wall and several of his ribs shattered once he eventually came down. He tired to pick himself up but the pain was too much then he lost consciousness.

    David lay on the ground his body twisted and near broken. A face suddenly appeared startling David it was blurred and he could not make it out but it was obviously female “I love you David,” said a voice in his head. “The hell,” muttered David weakly realising he was hallucinating from too much blood loss. “I will never leave your heart even when we are apart,” whispered the mysterious voice David held his head and cried out in pain, “Get out of my head!”

    “Hey is that eejit okay?” asked one small voice as a second replied, “I don’t know should we take him to uncle Shamus?” “Aye that’ll be the sensible idea Polom,” said the small and very hairy boy as both he and the young girl who appeared to be just as hairy began to pull David away from the site of his crash into the caves. “Hey isn’t that the busboy who works for the king of Abyssa?” asked the small girl to which the boy replied, “I’m gonnae tell uncle Shamus aboot this it could be a great chance tae mess wie him.” When David eventually came around, he had been surrounded by a group of small child like creatures wearing similar brown robes and carrying different kinds of weaponry.

    “Welcome to the underground village of Caledonia sir but I’m afraid you must die now,” said the biggest creature that appeared to be wearing a badge-saying chief on his sash, small hairy creatures moved in on the confused busboy. "Err is there anything I can say to spare me?" asked David wondering what the strange hairy things were. The chieftain though for a second and then smiled "Aye perhaps there is fleshy person,” he looked at David for a moment and then continued "We huv a small problem my fellow Bairns huv been going missing and one said that there Wis a bizarre three headed beast striking them Doon,"

    The assembled Bairns shuddered at the words man beast.” What is this creature you speak of?" asked David politely knowing that a wrong word may cause these Bairns to hurt him in various and nasty ways. "It is evil it killed six of my brothers last night I only have two left, it must be stopped please help us," said the small and very polite girl who had pulled him alongside the aforementioned brother to safety. David smiled a small tear rolling down his eye and said to the little girl “I would do this even if my life wasn’t in danger you can count on me,”

    Before David goes on his quest, may I pause the tale here to give you a little background on the creatures he has stumbled on. For you see the underground swelling Bairns were legendary to most Gaian citizens. David never had a proper education and thus knew nothing of them. I however do and for my next peek into Gaian life, we shall focus on the Bairns.

    A species called the Bairns were the first to make our world home. They came in two flavours the Rammen who resembled sheep and duggars who resembled well dogs. They had a rivalry, which spanned generations, which finally ended in the great battle of Battenberg. After the dust cleared, there was no clear winner and the remnants of the two tribes split to the far corners of the world. The fates of the duggars are unknown but the Rammen are the species, which David encountered in the caves beneath his home. They have many abilities much of which is lost in the sands of time I am afraid. Unknown to David they had a specific relationship with the rulers of Abyssa one which has been since terminated. Now read on…

    To be coninued...groan

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    Post by Shiny on Mon Aug 06, 2012 10:19 pm

    and welcome to more of chapter 1...I feel pity if you are reading this...This is very long for your continuing sanity do not read all of this shit at once...

    Later on once the Bairns used their magic to fix up David’s various wounds. David set off for the series of inlets where the monster was last spotted. It was legitimately creepy inside the cave bats screeched above him and at one point; he thought he saw a gigantic snake. However, it turned out to be a branch several roots, which had burrowed underground. He smiled, as he knew that must have been the royal tree that grew in the palace garden the three gardeners had told him once that its roots grew inside the ancient caves but he had never believed them until now.

    David began Crossing an underground river that was polluted and foul and hoping that brown log was not what he thought it was. Two Bairns named Palom and Polom who came to help him track the monster down followed him. “Hey never did say thanks for both of you taking my unconscious body to your village,” “It Wis nothing pal and thanks fer helping us.” “If you have any questions sir please ask away,” said Polom politely.

    David tried to word this carefully as not to offend the creatures "So what are you exactly then," "We are Bairns sir we live underground and do much of the work for castle Abyssa,” said Polom smiling at David "hold on you do what for the castle?” “We help with the refining from the water crystal to keep you airships powered,” “and in case yuir second question ends up bein whit I think it is yes we know who you are busboy,” laughed Palom with a boyish snigger. “Okay forget I asked,” muttered David under his breath.

    “Are all over dwellers as thick as this one,” whispered Palom “just this one brother others I do not know,” whispered Polom as she calmly nodded and smiled at David who said. “You knew me the entire time but continued your charade to scare me,” “its nothing personal pal its jist we love tae make it oot wie the “I’m gonnae kill ye banter wie the normals.”

    It felt like days but in reality only hours as they walked to the bottom cavern and spotted their quarry the evil creature that murdered several Bairns "Hide sir," said Polom and they ducked. Three men were talking loudly “so when do we get paid for this," said one of them as a second figure muttered “Next week Whipped we are going to hunt every last one of them now," David was shocked to see that not only was The three-headed man beast three poachers but that he recognised them. “That’s Whipped, Custard and Bourbon they are our Gardeners but what are they doing down here?” muttered David to the two Bairns as the three poachers conversation continued.

    "That’s just wrong that’s not fair on the poor things besides Bairn skins don't fetch all that much,” said the smallest man. “Yes that is true Custard but their blood is highly sought after as a poison,” said the short one. “We got to stop them,” said David shocked at the cruelty.” Sir it is too dangerous we must move our fellow Bairns to safety," said Polom quietly David turned to Polom and put his hand on her shoulder “I have an idea of how to save your tribe but it'll mean you have to go,”

    However, it was too late suddenly a gun was pointing at David “Get out here right now so I can see your face," the three of them had talked too loud and thus were caught by the poachers. “Go warn the tribe I’ll handle them,” shouted David and the two Bairns ran away. David then stood in front of Bourbon and said, “When the king learns of this he’ll kick you out of the court.” Bourbon walked over and whacked his gun right into David stomach breaking the same ribs from earlier again “foolish little busboy the king already knows,”

    “yes the king already knows and wanted us to…make you disappear nothing personal and all,” said Custard with a grin on his face. David’s face turned white not just from the pain but also from the revelation that the king a man he had trusted all his life had ordered his death. David struggled against the poachers but got beat up some more until Whipped laughed and said to the other two poachers “Kill him and then we will get the Bairns and our payoff from the king," Bourbon laughed grabbed his gun and cracked it right on David’s head. There was sick blackness and then David fell for the second time.

    David sat down near a fountain in an unknown castle and sighed to himself “huh where am I did I get captured,” as if to answer him the same voice from earlier called out “David.” “Oh brilliant I am in my screwed up head again,” “I need to go away for a while I will always love you and I shall keep the necklace you gave me as a reminder of our time together,” said the voice but this time there was a face as well. A beautiful brunette girl she wore long robes and a beautiful crown, which had a bright pink ruby inside it. She was stunning David looked at this girl and his heart jumped “Don’t go,” “Shhh don’t cry for me I’ll always love you,” said the beautiful girl who then kissed David. David woke up and noticed the poachers were gone.

    “Oh man what a strange dream,” he then suddenly remembered, "I must help the Bairns," he then ran to the village. Over the underground river, just missing the flowing vines, which grew underneath it hoping to ensnare anyone foolish enough to stop near it. and the dangerous and poisonous fish, which swam in it. Past the giant roots and the endless corridors. The pain was immense as he tried to run as fast as he could but the injuries kept slowing him down. When he got there, the village was in flames and the Bairns were missing David fell to the ground and tears streamed down his face. “no, I failed them;" he then noticed that the poachers were still there.

    David picked up a fallen piece of rock and a piece of wood and screamed in anger “Scum you killed them all," He ran to Custard and hit him in the head with the piece of wood he fell down in pain. Whipped ran to help his friend but Bourbon aiming for David instead accidentally shot Whipped and turned his gun on David “you made me shoot my friend I will rip you apart with my gun fire!” David grabbed the gun and threw it away. He then kicked Bourbon down onto the ground and then lifted him up to punch him. The punch connected and Bourbon knocked into their cart. A drape fell and the cart revealed its Cargo the Bairns. "You’re safe thank god,” said David smiling happily he begun to unlock the cages not noticing Bourbon picking himself up. Bourbon sneered and looked around for his gun “You will regret this,”

    Then Bourbon got up and everything blurred into slow motion. The cages opened and the Bairns got out. They attacked and killed Custard and begun to move towards Bourbon. With nothing to lose now his two friends are dead, he leaped over to his gun. David tried to stop him and grabbed Bourbon by the hands. There was a struggle and then Bourbon Pulled the trigger, fired his gun once, twice, three times and David looked at the three holes in his chest with a gasp. He struggled to stay on his feet until it was too late he fell down on the floor and closed his eyes lying in a pool of blood he was dead.

    The Bairns circled the dead body of David many were crying and others were just staring sadly” He died to save us,” said Palom tears down his face. The Bairns moved closer to David’s body. The chieftain Bairn put his hand on David and then smiled “He can be saved but he'll never be human again,”

    "Help him please," said Polom who was crying the hardest of them all. The chieftain pulled out his knife and then he put his hands on David’s chest, he used his knife to cut one of his fingers and then a single drop of green blood touched David’s open wound and he opened his eyes. Pain ran down his arms as all the cuts and wounds begun to heal themselves. His eyes changed colour to a bright green and his strength had appeared to increase. He smiled at the Bairns and pulled himself up “I was dead wasn’t I?” said David completely shocked by the experience “yes our uncle shamus saved your life but at a cost,” said Polom who was happily hugging David very tightly so tightly in fact David begun to turn bright red and stopped her very quickly.

    “Yes I can feel it I am one of you now aren’t I?” “Well not quite you are still human but you share some of our traits,” said chieftain Shamus as he sat down on a chair to get his breath back. “Uncle is you okay?” asked Polom taking the hand of her uncle, which was shaking. “One drawback of the blood ritual I just cast with David is it weakens the donor but I’ll be fine after a day or two…mister David I have a favour to ask of you,” “anything shamus after what you did!” said David smiling.

    It was several hours after the defeat of the three hunters and the Bairns were Celebrating. Three of them however were celebrating much harder than the other members of this proud race of creatures. There is palom the boy bairn big of heart and of mouth. Polom who was his sister, she was a very bossy girl and a very pretty one for the standards of Bairns anyway. Rounding out our three siblings was Archie the oldest and drunkest sibling. Polom was at the florists buying a lovely bouquet of flowers for her hero. “Hope David likes pretty flowers she says as she handed the gold coins over.

    Meanwhile Archie was sitting next to uncle Shamus the chief Bairn who was dying from old age. “sir you must not go yet,” cried Archie and then uncle Shamus the chief Bairn said “I wish David was here so I could thank him for all he has done,” “sir he is checking the tunnels one last time for any signs of the hunters,” uncle Shamus the chief Bairn closed his eyes and fell asleep. As this was happening palom was walking through the wooden village saying hi to everyone he knew, when he reached the second biggest building in town uncle Shamus the chief Bairns home. “Hello Archie how’s the elder and I got him grapes,” Polom who had just gotten here before him slapped him on the head and shouted“He’s dying palom I wonder where David is.”

    Meanwhile David was walking down the dark caves with a torch. He sighed finally convinced they were gone and headed back to the Bairn village. Once he returned he immediately ran to the Bairn chief’s house. when Shamus spoke he was not the vibrant man David had first met “don’t have much time son a evil threat is facing this world you must get the thirteen magical items before he comes back take the twins and get help before its too la” but he died and Palom and Polom cried. Archie stood at the back and held back his tears.

    David sighed as he begun to make his way up the tunnel to get home as Palom and polom followed. It was much harder climbing it than it was falling down it. Shamus before he died had asked David to take the twins with him to explore the world above. He also said that Poloms knack for solving riddles and Paloms archery skills would come in handy someday. After Paloms brother Archie gave Palom the bow of Mcmutton, which passed down their family for generations, they left to go and discover why the king had ordered his death. It had taken many hours of climbing to reach the top but they got there eventually, he knew something was up when he saw that the rocks that blocked the entrance were gone.

    It was when both he and the twins exited the cave that a truly horrifying sight greeted them. “The castle, the village its gone all gone,” muttered David mouth gaped open in horror. He was right as the village was, destroyed and all that was left of the castle was a broken shell, which was in flames. The west tower began to break away and David and the two Bairns quickly moved in time to escape the rubble. He quickly realised it was not empty as A blast of powerful magic just missed David and he looked up at the man who was glowing with dark magic. He was covered in darkness but he was instantly recognisable to David “Dad it’s me David,” shouted David but Dorrace fired another blast this time hitting Polom down with a severe bump.

    Palom ran over to his sister and shouted, “Are you okay?” “Yes I shall be fine that was pretty low level magic I don’t think this man is deliberately trying to hurt us at all.” David ran closer to Dorrace only to face the full power of the blasts, blasted right in his chest and the power threw him right next to the twins with a loud bump. “I really think we should go now Dave,” said Palom who was trying to help his sister up. “No not without the kings keep sake the Diamond sword!” shouted David as he pulled himself up and muttered, “you two get to the clearing you should be safe there,” then he ran over again.

    The fire was getting hotter and he was sweating. Lots of thoughts went through his mind as he ran “why did the king let this happen, why is my dad attacking me and the biggest question of all what the hell can I do about all this?” This time he carefully timed his father’s blast and then ran into the castle.

    The corridors were vast but he knew them all off by heart. He ducked as flames begun to envelope the kitchen where he had worked for as long as he had known. He ran further into the castle and saw that the queen was dead as was the prince and princess. “My god his family were killed was the king as bad as I thought he was,” as he walked past two dead guards he recognised them which made his heart sink even further, he then continued to his room in the servant’s quarters.

    The fire had not spread here yet which was a good sign at least. He opened the trunk next to his bed and pulled out several important items many of which, found on him when he found all those years ago. Once he tied the cloak onto himself, he pulled out the small knife that was inside it, after that he ran to the king’s throne room. He hid behind a mural and watched as the king’s treachery was slowly revealed.

    “King William heh what a joke…soon as you had a reason to do so you sold out your entire kingdom. Now what kind of a king does that make you?” asked a bespectacled man who was dressed smartly in a tuxedo and top hat. “Please Simon it is much more complicated than that and you know it,” “what that you sold your country and the power of the Diamond sword for you own greed. That you had Bourbon attempt to kill the boy…the only one who could defeat zero doom,” “But they threatened to kill my family if I did not do it,” “no they did kill your family and your soul by the stench that my power has revealed of it.”

    “What good could busboy David do to stop zero doom anyway,” at the mention of himself, he calmly stepped out and said to both of them “what about me?” “Go away busboy, these matters we are discussing does not concern,” William never finished as Simon cracked him over the head with his cane. “Hello David, my name is Simon Culp I wish we could meet in far better circumstances, but I am afraid it is too late for this castle and this blackened king.” “what about the Diamond sword?” to which Simon sighed “sorry the forces of evil already have it let us take leave of this foul place and hope that William makes his peace in the dark place he shall be heading to,”

    They both ran out of the castle as it finally crumbled under the strain that it had sustained. “David you should have left when I fired at you now he’ll kill us all,” said Dorrace his hands glowing with magic and ready for a fight. “It’s true really he sent his best enforcer to this country to corrupt the king and then destroy the land,” said Simon revealing that his cane was a holder for a thin rapier sword.

    David smiled and said, “Surely both your combined power can hold them back.” “Both our power comes from the dark place they are no match alas,” David sighed and pulled out his small knife, said “hey where are the twins?” as if to answer his question they both fell out of the tree unconscious but okay and then a blonde man dropped down after them and sneered “so at last we meet again!” David stared at the newcomer and said, “I have no idea who you are,” the blond man quick pulled out two silver revolvers from his coat and said, “Remember me now?”

    David shook his head causing the blond man moan “It’s me Floyd Lawson doesn’t you remember me at all?” “Sorry” said David shrugging his shoulders as Floyd angrier at this snub said “not even the chasms of kinsk?” “Enough of this inanity what do you want?” sneered, Simon his rapier still pointing in the direction of Floyd. “It’s quite simple I am here to rip you apart,” said Floyd smiling revealing for the first time his long teeth. “Oh you are a vampire!” said David astonished, as this was the first vampire he had ever seen.

    “Please I prefer the term Day walker not that you shall live long to understand what that means,” shouted Floyd firing six rounds each bouncing off Simons rapier. Floyd fired more and more but each carefully bounced off Simon’s rapier as if he knew where the bullets were going next. “Enough,” shouted Dorrace using his magic to pick Floyd from the ground and then chucked him far away with Floyd screamed foul obscenities as he went.

    “I thought this guy was meant to be a great threat,” said David smiling to which Dorrace said “that wasn’t him,” and then another man appeared and quickly with the stealth of a cat moved so fast they never saw him coming. A gash appeared on David’s cheek and a second scratch appeared on his chest. They quickly healed due to the Bairn blood but he had to act fast as neither Simon nor Dorrace had the same kind of blood. He quickly stuck out his leg and the mysterious man fell down with a crash.

    Simon looked in horror and recognised the man but before he could confirm the recognition, the man was gone. “Who the hell was that?” shouted David, as he looked around for the mysterious man “I’ve heard rumours of a cat like man who was in the employ of Zero doom but I am sure I recognised him when you tripped him,” “and who is this zero doom?” “I’ll tell all when we reach my humble abode please pick up the twins will you,” said Simon, quick to answer his request Dorrace, and David quickly picked both of them up. “I must forewarn you both these will feel bizarre for both of you” “what will feel…” David never finished as he looked at his legs, which were sinking into a black puddle. He struggled in horror not knowing what was going on and then he completely disappeared into the darkness of the shadow realm.

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